T1+Persuade

__7.4.2011__    L.I. We are learning make content relevant and add weight to argument by having an effective position statement, main points, evidence and restatement. Contain elaboration of main points.E ffective position statement:

S.C. We can


 * make our position and purpose clear
 * use a rhetorical question
 * include a list of fact/evidence that will be discussed in writing

Restatement, elaboration of main points: S.C. We Can
 * restate my position throughout my writing
 * make a main point and back it up with evidence or statistics

__Monday 14 March__

Dear Mr. Diver

I am writing to you because you have started an opportunity to improve our reputation and the efficiency of our school. We should get an extended morning tea like last Friday if us students get back to class on time everyday. If you were at student at T.I.S wouldn’t you like to have an extended morning tea on fridays?

Firstly if this happened the schools kids would become more enthusiastic about getting to class quicker which in turn would improve our learning. The time we saved getting to class quicker would make up for the time we used on friday.

Also it wouldn’t be extended just for the kids it would be for teachers too and that would mean they have more time to talk and mark work and prepare new lessons for us. so this new break idea would benefit everyone including you for instance you could play hand ball for longer with us kids and thats totally awesome!!

Also if we were outside for a bit longer everyday it would improve our fitness and the extra work out would improve our work in class and the parents would notice that there children’s grades have skyrocketed and would make a really really good reputation for the school.

I hope you will take my letter into consideration I feel strongly that this would be a very good thing for the school to do. I thank you for you time and patience.

Yours sincerely

Eden Smith

Eden you have painted a very clear picture in my head about how bad Nuclear Power can be. Add depth to your writing by backing it up with evidence 'facts/statistics' and always end with a conclusion.