Elsie+Lock+2011

__**ELSIE LOCK**__

**MY LEARNING TARGETS**

My next step in writing is to simplify my ideas. Eden you are very creative and have heaps of good ideas. For a short story (500 words) you need to have a very simple story line that clearly shows beginning, middle & end. I'm left wondering how the rest of his treatment goes and what happens to him???

I will achieve this by planning our my ideas, using a graphic organiser and sticking to the plan.

Date achieved: //Mrs Stock//

__**Thursday 9 June 2011**__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day I woke to find himself with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on my skin which was strange because I didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And I soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when I got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. I now though it was time to tell mum. "Mum" I yelled "yes James" she replied "something weird is happening to my body" I said. She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks "I seem to be getting weird kind of bruises that bleed and ooze" she sat down taking all of this in. "we need to get you to the doctors right away" She said "Ok" I replied.

We hopped into the car and rushed to the doctors. Mum and the doctor talked out side. I put my ear to the door. "so what do you thinks happening?"said Mum "I have a suspicion that James may have..." They went into whispers. So I didn't hear what they said next but I'm sure it wasn't good. They came back in the doctor said that I had to come with him. "why?" I said "just want to check you out is all".

He took me into a modern looking room with a white tunnel in it he told me to lie down. I obeyed I slid onto the cold metal tray that had extended from the tunnel. The doctor told me to keep calm and carry on. It started to go back into the white tunnel I suddenly got very nervous. Inside the tunnel I hear the doctor shout GO! and then a peculiar buzzing noise filled my ears. It was an extremely strange sensation. When it ended the tunnel started to slide out again. I was relieved.

The doctor came to me with a grim look on his face. He muttered something about the hardest part of his job. "listen kid, I think you may have skin cancer.... Oh know this is impossible. My head felt heavy "kid stop" I heard the doctor shout but he was so far away and then, I fell.

I woke up on a cold hard bench with my mum and the doctor staring down at me. "Are you all right?" asked mum. "What happened?" I asked rubbing my head. "You got the dreadful news and fainted" I gulped. "I remember."

The next few days were a blur. I told nobody about what happened. My social life fell to pieces because I just couldn't bring myself to talk to anyone. And as soon as my friends stopped trying to talk to me my entire life fell to pieces I hated school and stopped working, I hated home because I couldn't even talk to my mum. At least she noticed how hard it was having cancer and she said it would get better. But I knew different.

But I knew the worst was still to come. Treatment was on Monday and I knew what would happen to my hair. I sobbed the entire car trip to the doctors and burst into tears in the waiting room. The doctor said everything would be fine he injected some kind of liquid into my arm.

The next few weeks were a blur all I can remember is the torture of my old friends and the horrible liquid going into my arm.

A few days later I noticed my hair was starting to fall out. It was horrible or my old friends would notice and probably laugh. I was starting to think about running away or even suicide as I was thinking my thoughts were interrupted by a ring of the phone. BRING BRING “hello” “Hi james I was wondering weather you wanted to come over?” “sure” trying to sound casual “I’ll bike over to your house” and thats when things got better all thoughts of suicide lost in a blur of happiness everything was fine school home. And for the first time in my life I was truly happy.

__**ELSIE LOCK**__

__**Thursday 2 June 2011**__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day I woke to find himself with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on my skin which was strange because I didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And I soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when I got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. He now though it was time to tell mum. "Mum" "yes James" "something weird is happening to my body" I said She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks "I seem to be getting weird kind of bruises that bleed and ooze" she sat down taking all of this in. "we need to get you to the doctors right away" She said"Ok" I replied.

We hopped into the car and rushed to the doctors. Mum and the doctor talked out side. I put my ear to the door. "so what do you thinks happening?"said Mum "I have a suspicion that James may have..." They went into whispers. So I didn't hear what they said next but i'm sure it wasn't good. They came back in the doctor said that I had to come with him. "why?" I said "just want to check you out is all".

He took me into a modern looking room with a white tunnel in it he told me to lie down. I obeyed I slid onto the cold metal tray that had extended from the tunnel. The doctor told me to keep calm and carry on. It started to go back into the white tunnel I suddenly got very nervous. Inside the tunnel I hear the doctor shout GO! and then a peculiar buzzing noise filled my ears. It was an extremely strange sensation. When it ended the tunnel started to slide out again. I was relieved.

The doctor came to me with a grim look on his face. He muttered something about the hardest part of his job. "listen kid, I think you may have skin cancer.... Oh know this is impossible. My head felt heavy "kid stop" I heard the doctor shout but he was so far away and then, I fell.

I woke up on a cold hard bench with my mum and the doctor staring down at me. "Are you all right?" asked mum. "What happened?" I asked rubbing my head. "You got the dreadful news and fainted" I gulped. "I remember."

The next few days were a blur. I told nobody about what happened. My social life fell to pieces because I just couldn't bring myself to talk to anyone. And as soon as my friends stopped trying to talk to me my entire life fell to pieces I hated school and stopped working, I hated home because I couldn't even talk to my mum. At least she noticed how hard it was having cancer and she said it would get better. But I knew different.

But I knew the worst was still to come. Treatment was on monday and I knew what would happen to my hair. I sobbed the entire car trip to the doctors and burst into tears in the waiting room. The doctor said everything would be fine he injected some kind of liquid into my arm.

The next few weeks were a blur all I can remember is the torture of my old friends and the horrible liquid going into my arm.

A few days later I noticed my hair was starting to fall out. It was horrible or my old friends would notice and probably laugh. School was dreadful and I was starting to think about suicide It might a whole lot easier if I was dead. I though. And that brings me here to the present part in my story holding this long rope which is around my and tied onto my bed I’m about to jump when the door opens “MUM” I yell “It isn’t your fault” I jump she screams, and it all went black.

__**ELSIE LOCK**__

__**Tuesday 7 June 2011**__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day he woke to find himself in his bed with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on his skin which was strange because he didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And he soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when he got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. He now though it was time to tell mum. "Mum" "yes James" "something weird is happening to my body" I said She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks "I seem to be getting weird kind of bruises that bleed and ooze" she sat down taking all of this in. "we need to get you to the doctors right away" She said"Ok" I replied.

We hopped into the car and rushed to the doctors. "What seems to be the problem James" "I'm getting strange bruises which bleed and ooze" I said. "Alright I might just talk have a talk with your mother". They went outside. I put my ear to the door. "so what do you thinks happening?"said Mum "I have a suspicion that James may have..." They went into whispers. So I didn't hear what they said next but i'm sure it wasn't good. They came back in the doctor said that I had to come with him. "why?" I said "just want to check you out is all".

He took me into a modern looking room with a white tunnel in it he told me to lie down. I obeyed I slid onto the cold metal tray that had extended from the tunnel. The doctor told me to keep calm and carry on. It started to go back into the white tunnel I suddenly got very nervous. Inside the tunnel I hear the doctor shout GO! and then a peculiar buzzing noise filled my ears. It was an extremely strange sensation. When it ended the tunnel started to slide out again. I was relieved.

The doctor came to me with a grim look on his face. He muttered something about the hardest part of his job. "listen kid, I think you may have skin cancer. Oh know this is impossible. My head felt heavy "kid stop" I heard the doctor shout but he was so far away and then I fell.

I woke up on a cold hard bench with my mum and the doctor staring down at me. "Are you all right?" asked mum. "What happened?" I asked rubbing my head. "You got the dreadful news and fainted" I gulped. "I remember."

The next few days were a blur. I told nobody about what happened. My social life fell to pieces because I just couldn't bring myself to talk to anyone. And as soon as my friends stopped trying to talk to me my entire life fell to pieces I hated school and simply stopped working, I hated home because I couldn't even talk to my mum. At least she noticed how hard it was having cancer and she said it would get better. But I knew it wouldn't.

But I knew the worst was still to come. Treatment was on monday and I knew what would happen to my hair. I sobbed the entire car trip to the doctors and burst into tears in the waiting room. The doctor said everything would be kind

__**ELSIE LOCK**__

__**Monday 30 May 2011**__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day he woke to find himself in his bed with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on his skin which was strange because he didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And he soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when he got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. He now though it was time to tell mum. "Mum" "yes James" "something weird is happening to my body" I said She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks "I seem to be getting weird kind of bruises that bleed and ooze" she sat down taking all of this in. "we need to get you to the doctors right away" She said"Ok" I replied.

We hopped into the car and rushed to the doctors. "What seems to be the problem James" "I'm getting strange bruises which bleed and ooze" I said. "Alright I might just talk have a talk with your mother". They went outside. I put my ear to the door. "so what do you thinks happening?"said Mum "I have a suspicion that James may have..." They went into whispers. So I didn't hear what they said next but i'm sure it wasn't good. They came back in the doctor said that I had to come with him. "why?" I said "just want to check you out is all".

He took me into a modern looking room with a white tunnel in it he told me to lie down. I obeyed I slid onto the cold metal tray that had extended from the tunnel. The doctor told me to keep calm and carry on. It started to go back into the white tunnel I suddenly got very nervous. Inside the tunnel I hear the doctor shout GO! and then a peculiar buzzing noise filled my ears. It was an extremely strange sensation. When it ended the tunnel started to slide out again. I was relieved.

The doctor came to me with a grim look on his face. He muttered something about the hardest part of his job. "listen kid I think you may have skin cancer. oh know this is impossible. My head felt heavy "kid stop" I heard the doctor shout but he was so far away and then I fell.

I woke up on a cold hard bench

__**ELSIE LOCK**__

__**Monday 21 May 2011**__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day he woke to find himself in his bed with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on his skin which was strange because he didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And he soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when he got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. He now though it was time to tell mum. "Mum" "yes James" "something weird is happening to my body" I said She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks "I seem to be getting weird kind of bruises that bleed and ooze" she sat down taking all of this in. "we need to get you to the doctors right away" She said"Ok" I replied.

We hopped into the car and rushed to the doctors. "What seems to be the problem James" "I'm getting strange bruises which bleed and ooze" I said. "Alright I might just talk have a talk with your mother". They went outside. I put my ear to the door. "so what do you thinks happening?"said Mum "I have a suspicion that James may have..." They went into whispers. So I didn't hear what they said next but i'm sure it wasn't good. They came back in the doctor said that I had to come with him. "why?" I said "just want to check you out is all".

He took me into a modern looking room with a white tunnel in it he told me to lie down. I obeyed I slid onto the cold metal tray that had extended from the tunnel. The doctor told me to keep calm and carry on. It started to go back into the white tunnel I suddenly got very nervous. Inside the tunnel I hear the doctor shout GO! and then a peculiar buzzing noise filled my ears.

__**ELSIE LOCK**__

__**Monday 21 May 2011**__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day he woke to find himself in his bed with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on his skin which was strange because he didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And he soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when he got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. He now though it was time to tell mum. "Mum" "yes James" "something weird is happening to my body" I said She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks "I seem to be getting weird kind of bruises that bleed and ooze" she sat down taking all of this in. "we need to get you to the doctors right away" She said"Ok" I replied.

We hopped into the car and rushed to the doctors. "What seems to be the problem James" "I'm getting strange bruises which bleed and ooze" I said. "Alright I might just talk have a talk with your mother". They went outside. I put my ear to the door. "so what do you thinks happening?"said Mum "I have a suspicion that James may have..." They went into whispers. So I didn't hear what they said next but i'm sure it wasn't good. They came back in the doctor said that I had to come with him. "why?" I said "just want to check you out is all".

He took me into a modern looking room with a white tunnel in it he told me to lie down. I obeyed I slid onto the cold metal tray that had extended from the tunnel. The doctor told me to keep calm and carry on. It started to go back into the white tunnel I suddenly got very nervous

__Wednesday 18 May__ It started off as a normal day. I went to school, played some football nothing different, it wasn't until the next day that things started to change. The next day he woke to find himself in his bed with unusual bumps that looked like bruises on his skin which was strange because he didn't remember playing football roughly the day before. They'll probably go away in a few days. But they didn't if anything there only seemed to be more of them. And he soon realized that they were bleeding and thats when he got worried.

First they would bleed or sometimes ooze out weird liquid then it would form a scab and start it over again. He now thought it was time to tell mum. "Mum" "yes James" "something weird is happening to my body" I said, She sighed "Its time we had the talk, When two adults love each other very very much" "not that kind of stuff Mum" I interrupted her. "Its to do with my skin" I say "well what is it?" she asks